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FINALLY had time to read this. Last week was nuts trying to get my own story finished and squeezing in a read today has been a challenge.

All that said I thought this was really cool! Way to weave in the Institute to your final challenge. I, for one, enjoyed the transitions and I thought you did really well taking Matthew from "sin" to "repentance" so to speak. Well done!

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Thank you Derek! I think I've skimmed the other stories for this last challenge but haven't been able to give them each a good thorough read yet. Looking forward to it for sure. I'm glad you enjoyed the story, and yes, look for more Institute content coming sooner or later!

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Another hit, Sara. The whole time I was reading, I was trying to guess the end. You got me! Great piece.

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Ahh, thanks Cork! This is such high praise! Hope you had a lovely trip and can't wait to read yours once you get it polished up!

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Oh, this was nice. I liked the callback when Matthew said "Good luck" to Aaron, as opposed to when he said it to Chris before. Very well done.

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Thanks Michael! I tried to add a couple of callback elements - Cork did that in his first story and it was so satisfying, so I had to try to work something similar into this one!

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Stellar! Well done, very satisfying. I see now the connections to your Crunch you published today? Recently?

Really enjoyed this. You have an imaginative world here and it all fits very well together--I hope you don't stop writing in this setting! It packs an emotional punch and was still fun to read. Thank you so much for your participation in this competition. You've helped make it competitive and fun and I am grateful!

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