Received, Read, reviewed, and your feedback is prepared! For fairness, I will wait to deliver it once I've received and reviewed your fellow competitor's stories as well.
That aside, I enjoyed this! You'll see my more detailed comments this week, but splitting hairs aside and taking your story for what it is, I enjoyed it a lot! Have you ever read Ray Bradbury's short story "The Veldt"? It hits some similar notes though takes it in a different direction.
I think this story tapped into something in me that I can't quite put my finger on. I don't even know what to say... Excellent take. Just excellent. ❤️
"Meticulously, with the focused concentration only a child can muster," ... loved this description. I can certainly relate to this. I love to see my daughter when she's focused on whatever single task it is.
Received, Read, reviewed, and your feedback is prepared! For fairness, I will wait to deliver it once I've received and reviewed your fellow competitor's stories as well.
That aside, I enjoyed this! You'll see my more detailed comments this week, but splitting hairs aside and taking your story for what it is, I enjoyed it a lot! Have you ever read Ray Bradbury's short story "The Veldt"? It hits some similar notes though takes it in a different direction.
Well done!
I think this story tapped into something in me that I can't quite put my finger on. I don't even know what to say... Excellent take. Just excellent. ❤️
Thank you Christina! I’m glad you enjoyed it!
Wow ... Very vivid picture, Sara.
Thank you! Can’t wait to give yours a read!
"Meticulously, with the focused concentration only a child can muster," ... loved this description. I can certainly relate to this. I love to see my daughter when she's focused on whatever single task it is.
And man have you got tension! Well done!
Thanks Derek! Looking forward to reading yours!